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San Diego Jewish Academy High School Humanities Re-Vision

Re-vision, or look at it again, baby!
Trying to be an objective bystander of your own work,
answer the following questions:

1. Does your subject develop clearly?
   
2. Do your words provide a snapshot of your object or idea?
   
3. Have you included an appeal to some or all of the five senses: hearing, smelling, touching, tasting, seeing?
   
4. Have you created a fresh, springy, unexpected simile or metaphor that WORKS?
   
5. How about MUSIC?
   Can you find assonance (repetition of vowel sounds)?
   Can you find alliteration (repetition of initial consonant sounds)?
   If not, can you change some words to inject assonance or alliteration?
6. What about your line lengths?
   Are they speaking in a way you want them to?
   
7. Do the lines end with musical, high impact words (nouns and verbs), as opposed to articles (a, an, the) or prepositions (to,for)?
   
8. Finally, are you satisfied with the results, truly?
   No, really satisfied?
   What's still bugging you?
   What would you change?
   TRY IT! You'll never know until you try.